Post#7 -- one of the body paragraphs

My tentative thesis statement: whether online classroom is really more beneficial than traditional face-to-face teaching in the college environment
In my essay, I'm going to present the opinions from different groups of people who are heavily involved in this issue, namely students, instructors and the leading instutitions who are now implementing online learning (i.e. the Univeresity of Phoenix, Kaplan)

The following is one of the body paragraphs on the instructors' part.


Some instructors are not optimistic about the future of online classrooms. Laurie Fendrich, a professor of Fine Arts at Hofstra University, says in her blog that “those who embrace distance learning as a reasonable substitute for students going to college argue their case in the name of efficiency and productivity…I say to hell with efficiency and productivity if it means any more distance learning than we already have. What's the point of living if we all turn into robots?” She expresses her disagreement with the proponents of online classrooms through forceful rhetorical questions, describing students taking online classes as “robots”, implying that online learning reduces real human-interaction and makes people become unsociable. However, when examining Professor Fendrich’s area of expertise, which is Fine Arts, it is found that there might be possible bias in her comment due to her underlying values as an artist. When learning art, people highly value the actual communication and interaction between the artist and the piece of work. One can barely study art through the computer screen as it weakens any emotional or spiritual sentiment. Thus, similarly, it is not surprising that Professor Fendrich stresses the significance of face-to-face interaction. In online classrooms, students are neither able to see each other nor the instructor in-person. Not being able to have emotional exchange, Professor Fendrich therefore thinks their communication through typed words is mechanical and lacks vitality. These biases may have slight influence on her competence to make judgements on the issue.



The thing that I'm most concerned about this paragraph is that whether I'm on the right track in analyzing the source. For the opinion of Professor Laurie Fendrich, I tried to analyze her background and credibility, examining any possible bias in her comment.
I will continue on the instructors' part in another paragraph, in which I will be mostly talking about the voices opposing Professor Fendrich's comment.

P.S. There's another short paragraph which briefly introduce the main role of instructors before this paragraph.